Today, I want to share with you guys a sample essay that I wrote earlier. This is a “bar chart” type of question.
As usual, my essay follows a “simple and effective” approach. I focused on describing and comparing figures in a way that is easy for the readers to read, instead of trying to use difficult words and grammar structures.
Take note of the sentence structures that I have used to describe and compare figures in this essay.
The two bar charts compare graduates and postgraduates in the UK who did not work full-time in terms of what they did after finishing college in 2008.
It is clear that UK graduates who did not have full-time jobs were most likely to continue their study after leaving college. Meanwhile, part-time work and further study were the two most common choices for postgraduate students who did not work full-time.
For graduate students, the number of those deciding to study further was highest, at 29,665. By contrast, the figure for graduates who chose voluntary work was lowest, at only 3,500 students. While nearly 18,000 graduates had part-time jobs, there were more than 16,000 students who were unemployed after finishing their undergraduate courses.
For graduates, further study was also the most popular option with around 2,700 students choosing to continue their study after college, whereas the number of those working part-time was slightly lower, at 2,535 students. While there were approximately 1,600 postgraduates who had to face unemployment, only 345 decided to become volunteers.
(172 words, by The IELTS Genius)